xanthan gum

Overuse of the word ...erm..."word"

I felt this situation, so I'm going to be all lax all on you. Basically, I love this writing style from you and I loved this poem. I mean, don't ...

(I feel obligated to at least try, so here are my notebook scratchings.) Hey, Miss Beautiful Can you feel the buzz? Lithium is lying on your tongue and you - ...

This sounds more like song lyrics than anything. It would sound prettier with a melody. I agree with DD.

Colon. Why does it end in a colon?

GAH! Sorry. What's the strictest habit you peform?

It's usually relative warm out on the seas. I prefer it there, best. --Captain Aloisio It's freezing - somebody came up with the idea of building this tower above the ...

*joins writely*

My neck- wet with sweat. It would fit with the rhythm more, actually, to say "My neck is wet with sweat". There is no definite ending to this. I wish ...

Reams of papers, covered in darkling texts, they scream. Two people bound by matrimony, divided by ten thousand going to war - how long until one will become half by ...

A lot of parts are redundant and the rhyming is a bit forced. Work on this, first.

Gummy: So, our paths finally cross. You've been dancing around me for a while, studying me and such, and it's been quite annoying... So I'm glad that you've finally started. ...

"What will you do for a ten, baby? C'mon, lay it all out on the bathroom floor." Gripping the lust in my left hand, I slip it under my dress ...

Yeah, I'm going to tear this apart line by line because I hate you. :D The spots where ancient bruises used to live catch his furtive glances; spots are catching ...

Meh. Sign me up if YWS Annonymus ever comes out.